The chopper blades whir.
Cries ring out from young men
Fighting a war the public no longer believes in
For a cause that was lied about.
Proof was not found,
But still they fight on
Dying, bleeding, killing.
These are the bravest of us all.
We hope and pray
That our brothers, cousins,
Sons, husbands, and fathers
Come back the men they once were,
Unbroken, strong, and compassionate.
These boys fight on,
But they are no longer
The men we once knew.
They have been hardened
By the darkness of war.
I really liked the theme and the overall layout of this poem, Bendo. The last 2 stanzas were awesome but I'm pretty sure they let women in the military too you sexist pig. Unless you were talking about a different war then I apologize.
ReplyDeletewell i just wasn't sure how to fit that in there cuz i had thought about it but i don't know just the way it would've sounded didn't work right in my head i guess. i should probably fix that.
ReplyDeleteI agree with James, but I understand that men/man is sometimes used to include both men and women. You could fix it by adding mother or sister or something in that part where it mentions a plethora of male family members.
ReplyDeleteGood work though Ben!
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ReplyDeleteBut, seriously, must we ALWAYS be politically correct? Besides, aren't women, by law, excluded from combat service?
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